Talk:Eris Boreas Greyrat/@comment-25272435-20150308224323/@comment-31429492-20170302122720

Honestly I felt it was a deus ex machina sham.

Rudy should have at the very least threatened the butler of her whereabouts, been angry and emotional and at the very least for a small period of time should have tried to search for her. It would've been fine even if he didn't find her and eventually gave up in order to search for his mother. But "Where is Eris!?", "I'm sorry I'm not allowed to say", "Oh, I guess I'll go look for my mother." is not what I wanted from the protagonist.

I can understand that the seperation was neccesary for Eris to grow stronger and to allow Sylphy and Roxy to be accepted into his 'harem'. But the seperation as it was done just felt like crap.

I also don't like how oddly conservative the author is when it comes to writing about their relationships. Abstinence because fighting Gisu, the severe lack of romance in many parts. Come on, plenty of romantic and sexy things to be done without copulation! There was plenty of room to write about and deepen the relationships between the characters. Feels like such a missed oppertunity.

I've never written a story in the perspective present tense form of a dialogue heavy web/lightnovel, but I am actually considering writing a similar story then this one right now because I see so much potential that was lost in this story.

Also, skipping ahead like 50 years and writing about the end of his life was a mistake in my opinion as well. It's better to leave those things unwritten or from a perspective of one of their children in their fight against Hitogami.