The following texts have been translated from the original Japanese with the help of DeepL and Google Translate and my very own meagre knowledge of Japanese, so remember it is never a 100% accurate translation. If you wish to proofread, I'm more than happy for that. And if you see any mistakes, please leave a note on my message wall or in the comments section below ASAP! And regarding the update schedule, I don't plan to go 400 at once. I'm setting a goal of 10 per week.
Report #1
November 28, 2012
It's been a week since I started uploading. The number of accesses was not particularly high, and I thought it would be like this since I didn't advertise it anywhere, but today it suddenly tripled. I wonder what's going on. On one hand, I'm happy, but on the other hand, my stomach hurts.
- About the future:
For now, I've got a certain amount of writing done, so I'll be able to update every day for another month or so. However, I'm mentally weak, so if there are any comments that are simple swear words or harsh criticism, I may stop updating for a couple of days. Or it may stop permanently. The thorn of words are enough to scare away a person... However, I've got about 100 episodes of plot in mind, and I'd like to finish writing up to that point, so I'm going to try my best until then.
The plan is to move forward with the story until episode 25, and then slow down. That's just the plan. For now, my goal is to advance the story by one step per chapter.
- About comments:
I will try to reply to all comments as much as possible. I'm looking forward to any and all feedback, but if it's just one word: "Boring"! or something like that, you can only effectively depress my heart. Please don't do this.
- Postscript:
I wrote above that I would try to reply to all comments, but I received an assertion that "trolls also come here".
As for me, I'd like to be able to write comfortably by only listening to the words that feel good, but I guess that's not always possible, and I'm sorry, but for the time being, comments on the bulletin that cannot be replied to individually are prohibited.
But I'm not absolutely confident in my writing, so I want comments and advice itself. But I can easily imagine myself getting depressed whenever I am criticized. It's a two-way street. So, I will try to return comments as much as I can, and if I feel that I can't do it, I will suddenly shut it off. Please understand if this happens.
Report #2
November 30, 2012
Thanks to your help, we seem to have taken the number one ranking for the day. 210,000 PV and 17,000 unique. I'm grateful that so many people have seen this site in one day, but at the same time, I feel so bad that my stomach hurts.
To put it bluntly, what I want to write is not a story about the rehabilitation of a bum NEET, but an "alternate world reincarnation story" that can be found anywhere. In the "Childhood Arc," I just want to rehabilitate himself as a NEET and create a foundation for living in this world. At the same time, it foreshadows the story. In a sense, it's character building. It's fun to make characters. I can see why everyone is addicted to it.
But just because a character's makeup is interesting doesn't mean that the game itself is interesting. I'll try my best to make it interesting, but I'm afraid it won't be at the level readers are expecting...? I'll try to make it interesting.
At the very least, as we continue to slow down the story's flow of time, there will be fewer and fewer chapters that are packed with many things. A child's year is more concentrated than an adult's year.
This is a preventive line.
Oh, and if you find any inconsistencies in the setting, please don't hesitate to point them out. I'll do my best to cover it up with post-production settings, but if there's nothing I can do, I'll quickly rewrite the problematic parts. It's just my lack of skill.
Report #3
December 03, 2012
I want to punch my father, Paul. You're abusive! Unbelievable! I want to punch my father.
It seems that everyone was very emotionally involved with Sylphie.
It's a success for the author.
I'm sure those who are frustrated with being separated from Sylphie at this point will be very moved when she reappears.
Well, that's if I can write it without going that far into eternity.
I'll include an explanation of Paul's feelings in episodes 10-11 —
1. "My feeling is that I want Rudeus to see the wider world."
"He's good, he can make it anywhere. If he wants to, he can become a court magician or a hero who will go down in history. I don't want them to be small. That's how I see it."
2. Paul is aware that the protagonist is struggling to reach his potential. In the story, Paul suggests to the protagonist that he should become an adventurer. As Sylphie notices, Paul also notices that the protagonist is struggling to grow.
3. Paul believes that the cause of the stagnation has to do with his own lack of ability to teach. Rudeus can't make any progress in sword fighting. His own leadership skills are not enough, and there is no one here who can teach him magic anymore.
4. Paul went out into the world at a young age, so he knows the harshness, fun, and freedom of the world. Because of reasons 1 through 4, he thinks he should leave the village sooner or later. (However, he also thinks he is still too young.)
5. "Rudeus flippantly asked me to pay for school for the two of them."
"He, who helps Zenith keep a household account and should know that the family budget is somewhat strained.
Isn't this because he doesn't understand the value of money?" Paul thinks.
6. Confirmation of dependency "It is a noble but dangerous idea to earn school fees for Silphie by yourself. You are not able to make a sound judgment."
7. "The magic university is in another country."
"Not only the tuition, but also the travel expenses are substantial. Also the cost of staying."
Based on the above judgements, the options Paul took were as follows.
- Separate the two people who are dependent on each other and give them time to reevaluate their distance and feelings.
- Ask for guidance from someone who has more leadership ability than you.
- Provide a place and situation where they can learn the value of money and how to use it.
- They have a good attitude toward earning money, so give them what they want.
- However, if the work is easy, they may not understand how hard it is to work, so make the work as hard as possible.
- If I go along with him, I may spoil him, so leave him in the hands of a reliable person who can see things from a calm, third-party perspective.
However, Paul thought that if he told his son about it, there was a high probability that he would say that he would take Sylphi with him and that he would be talked into it. So, he silenced him by force. There were other ways, but he wanted to make her feel helpless.
"I don't really want to do this because of what my parents have done to me in the past, but I know it works. The reason why the letter is so light is because I feel guilty."
"However, he is not just a kid, and he should understand what I want to do, so I'm satisfied. I still have some regrets, though."
SUMMARY: Paul is not a bad guy.
wish I could have written about this carefully in episode 10, but it turned out to be a mess. I wondered if Paul, a man of muscles, would think this much.
I'm hoping to rewrite the story based on both aspects, but the amount I need to add will be enormous. Even now, I'm thinking that it's okay to say that Paul separated them with a light heart.
Report #4
December 03, 2012
I've added some extra content to the end of episode 11. It's still tentative change though. I'm sure this isn't what the people who want me to do something about Paul's scumminess want, and I was tempted to write this and that in the activity report to defend him, and reply to comments in a blurry manner. I guess you would think the author really wants the readers to be aware that he's as careless as possible (especially when it comes to women), considering what will happen when he reappears. On the contrary, I may have written Paul as a good guy too much in the beginning. Now he's really just a jerk who's getting carried away because he's strong....
Well, making excuses won't get us anywhere. And I'm sure that the description was a bit messy.
As an author, I feel like I'm getting battered more and more. I told you not to get your hopes up because I knew this would happen from the beginning lol.
Anyway, I'm going to take a break from posting for a week or so, because it's been getting a bit messy lately. I've finished chapter 1, and I want to take my time fixing chapter 2, and my ears and heart are aching from all the criticism I've been getting.
Other writers seem to be posting only once a week, so maybe this is the way it is. Well, a hiatus is a hiatus. I've decided on a theme for each chapter, and I'd like to finish them all at once. So if I haven't finished chapter 3 by the time I finish chapter 2, I'll probably pause again. If I can't finish it, I won't be able to review it.
I'll return to the comments when I have time.
If I don't even come back to reply to comments, just say I ran away or in "ETA". I've already finished writing chapter 2, so I don't think there's any chance of an ETA at this point.
By the way, before I go any further. I'm going to change the scene and environment in each chapter. In chapter 2, the protagonist leaves the village when his father forcefully sends him away and becomes a tutor. And in chapter 3, the environment will change more drastically due to a ton of development (from the reader's point of view). The only scene change due to a dramatic turn of events will be in chapter 3, but I think many people will find it too sudden to follow.
Thank you for your patience.
Report #5
December 08, 2012
In Chapter 2, the main focus is on developing the young lady. The key to the story is how to raise the ferocious young lady to be cute, ladylike, and to your liking. It's Princess Maker (just kidding).
- Depressing development from here:
Well, that's just the way I am, you know? I have some plot events in mind, but it's not always possible to write them in an interesting and consistent way. For now, I'm just replying to the feedbacks and gradually adding what I think is necessary. When I'm typing, I can't really focus on the text, so I appreciate accurate feedback, even if it's a harsh criticism.
I basically write based on my own knowledge, so I'd like to hear, "Isn't that wrong?" "Shouldn't it be like this?" et cetera. I'm sure there will be a lot of "Isn't that wrong?" In such a case, please write it down in your feedback in proper words, and I will solve it in a timely manner.
If there's a line of thinking that makes sense to me, I'll stick to that line and refuse to rewrite as much as possible. By the way, I'm a bit forgetful, so there are times when I've already forgotten something I wrote in chapter 1 or 2 by chapter 3. Seriously, as the second half of the story progresses, inconsistencies will become more and more common. I'd appreciate it if you could point them out early. But be gentle, okay? Gently, you know?
As for the development that could have been done better, I'm going to do it in a way that the main character didn't conceive of. I'm also trying to think of ways to make the story more interesting, but the performance of my brain is not good enough. Well, if you give me some feedback, I'm sure the main character will lament in the next chapter, "I should have done that!" lol.
Also, my original text is very hard to read. I've tried to make it as easy to read as possible, but there are still parts that are hard to understand. When you read it, you may think, "Huh? Isn't something missing here? "Incomprehensible lmao" "What's wrong with the flow of the story?"
I'd like to ask for your kind understanding that the author struggled with such parts.
For those of you who have read the first chapter and found it as an impressive piece, I regret to inform you that what I actually want to write on this "Shosetsuka ni Naro" site is pretty much another one of those "isekai tensei" story. If you're expecting something different, you'll probably find this story a bit boring as it goes on.
Please understand.
Also, I see a lot of people who say, "Don't be frightened, be sharp". Well, I'm kind of a novice on the internet.